Response to Proposal feedback

I just received my research proposal and was surprisingly pleased with it. One of the bigger things that I did not notice is that I never once used the word "I" in research that I was proposing. In some areas I can see how this would make the wording more awkward and not as smooth. The biggest section I should do that in is my research plan....it is kind of hard to say what I am going to do without the word "I". This will help it flow much more smoothly. It seems from the comments that I was able to get my main idea across well and the purpose for the research. Most of the problems tend to be in the flow of the sections. Another MAIN issue that I need to fix is the fact that I never state what exactly will be the product of my research. I will have to include a new section containing what my research will be used on.......but I am pretty pleased overall