Peer feedback

The response to my essay was very pleasing. It seems (from the response) that I got my purpose across effectively. I was trying to spark an interest in prospective members of my community, Engineers Without Borders. In Rae's response to my paper she said "you did a great job representing the group to prospective members" and "it made me want to go to a meeting to check it out and see what it was all about." I think that this is great because I achieved the effect I desired in the reader. While i got from the response that i got my purpose and audience across , there are areas for imporvement. Rae gave some good suggestions on where to enhance the writing. I could include the idea of "ut prosim" in the paper to tie in how connected EWB is with Virginia Tech. Also I could expand on the idea that EWB helps its own members in alot of different ways. Overall i am very happy with this